Fluorescent blue:
on a rainy day.

—Jon Summers

Nigella flowers in high summer.

About the author: Jon Summers lives in South Wales, and has had haiku published in a variety of magazines including Blithe Spirit, Presence and Fire. He lives with his wife, a rapidly growing son, and an ever-shrinking amount of time to actually get any writing done!

email: SummersJ at logica.com


Responses to the haiku for 15 July 2003 by Jon Summers

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-15 15:42:44

    love in the mist...

    miss jekyll

    cornelius crosson (cornelius at entermail dot net)
    2003-07-15 18:45:45

    having a need to define something in a haiku seems to defeat the whole idea, doesn't it?

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-15 20:27:01

    quite right, cornelius, but there are those who knew what jon was referring to

    my first reading, my thoughts were towards the

    one of our constituents made note of those who aren't familiar with certain terms, phrases, quotes, or words. if i recall correctly, she said the "normal individuals", but don't quote me on this

    most things in the typical haiku are the norm, or things which people can readily associate with

    when there is an introduction of something strange, i relish doing the research; adding to my knowledge

    rather than the nigella, one could express the flower as the buttercup; however, this would be denying the moment as it was

    all haikus are not worldly appreciated

    variance of customs and environments contribute to this denial, unless one takes the time to learn

    the piece is sentimentally nice, though falling short being a haiku, due to lack of comparison, turning point, and clarity, compounded by a bit of fantasizing

    Jon Summers (SummersJ at Logica dot Com)
    2003-07-16 03:40:38

    Cheers for the comments.

    I would say that Nigella is a very common flower in the UK. I've got tons of the stuff self-seeding over the garden!

    Fair point about comparison / turning point, though I'm not sure these are always required. But fantasizing? You should have been there that day...

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-17 16:46:55

    you are indeed correct in all you have said.
    of late and throughout the course of time, people fail to understand these variances from the "rules" tend to breath new life into any literary form.

    i would imagine when more objective words were created, above and beyond the occasional grunts during prehistoric times, the stares the speaker received.

    as for this being a common floral in the u. k., true, and this is what i meant by variations in environment.

    jon, that's the reason you wrote this piece, because the vast majority of readers were not there for the day, however in recreating the story, we can keep too much to ourselves by creating a fantasizing moment...

    jon, keep writing along this line.

    d f tweney (dft at tinywords dot com)
    2003-07-23 00:49:46

    No turning point or comparison? What about the sharp contrast between the fluorescent blue of the flower, and the greyness of a rainy day? This is neither definition, nor simple description. Rather, by juxtaposing two vivid, contrasting impressions, it's just what it should be: Haiku.

    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 22:18:07

    leaves moving
    the light

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-27 14:05:17

    dft, i hadn't seen your comment, from a year ago. i, yet, feel a comparison wasn't being made, rather a completion of the moment


    a rainy day --
    my thoughts in-between