from across the crowded dining table  her laughter


gK 2002-3

About the author: gK is a member of the Southern California Haiku Study Group. Besides writing haiku, senryu, and tanka, gK also writes science fiction haiku (also known as scifaiku), and is a moderator for the scifaiku mailing list at Yahoo! Groups.

Responses to the haiku for 17 September 2003 by gK

    paul m.
    2003-09-18 11:10:28

    The laughter's motion is well illustrated in the text, and my discovery (every haiku should have a discovery) of that single voice in the crowd is delightful.

    Todd Claus (todd dot claus at us dot army dot mil)
    2003-09-18 16:56:16

    Enjoyed this one much, gK. The single line works here especially well.

    2003-09-20 03:55:05

    I like this a lot too, gK. My only (small) criticism would be about the extra space before 'her laughter'; <imho>it just seems like a(n almost?) subliminal (read 'cheaty') way of adding a break. And it works perfectly well without it </imho>

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-09-20 11:19:23


    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-09-21 09:18:29

    gk, i read, reread, read again, and reviewed your one liner. at first, because of my nature for things being as they are, i struggled with it.

    my thinking of (prepositions) and their usage, a battle raged within.

    HOWEVER, i placed my (self) at the table, and participated in the meal and conversing; then there it was, i understood where you were coming "FROM"; how my attention was gotten by the laughter.

    very good

    gk, i, then, understood your perception

    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-27 08:19:28

    her laughter
    from the crowd

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-18 20:50:25

    out of the pitch-black darkness a light