the cool air inside
the terminal rests on me
when I say farewell

—Troy Freund

Haiku written as part of a daily creative exercise. This haiku was Day #172.

About the author: Troy Freund, freelance photographer in Milwaukee, WI.

Responses to the haiku for 13 October 2003 by Troy Freund

    Elbert Pruitt
    2003-10-15 11:34:32

    Troy, I like the familiar moment portrayed here, but omit line one to reveal a potential distraction in the remainder of the poem. Sometimes a single line will leap out and dominate the poem's true intent, as line 2 does. -just a thought

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-10-17 19:58:25

    final farewell, tears:
    the voice on the terminal intercom

    john tiong chunghoo (bagiruang at yahoo dot com)
    2003-12-05 06:11:57

    i did experience moment like this.

    with each goodbye
    i utter, her face

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-21 19:33:54

    green, blue
    red, yellow, and white -
    parrot refusing to say "bob"