couple in the pub
they both strip off
the beer labels

—Rafal Zabratynski

About the author: I live in Rzeszow, Poland, where I enjoy teaching teenagers English. My poems have been published in Haiku Harvest and Asahi Haikuist Network, and I am a member of the AHA Poetry Forums. Writing haiku is one of my favourite ways of admiring the world. My website is: http://www.raaav.xt.pl/.
My e-mail address is: raaav at wp dot pl

8 responses
published 5 January 2007
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Responses to the haiku for 5 January 2007 by Rafal Zabratynski

  1.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-01-05 04:18:03
     

    Great! I see this so often, that it's nice to have it captured in a haiku. Thank you!

  2.  
    Magyar
    2007-01-05 06:58:14
     

    _I've seen that Rafal!
    _ A Kuku Ku response.

    four "Lites"
    green light, yellow light, red.
    blue light... ooops_!

  3.  
    Matt C.
    2007-01-05 08:12:29
     

    "Mommy and Daddy
    how did you two meet again?"
    "Well kids it's like this...."

  4.  
    nigel brampton
    2007-01-05 14:27:12
     

    spice cologne
    a buzzed barfly drones
    on and on


    your senryu hits home. we need all the haiku
    and senryu we can get on bar and booze
    cultchur! dedicate em all to chuck bukowski!

  5.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-01-05 16:20:54
     

    Good observation, Rafal.

    old married couple
    they snap their fortune cookies
    at the same moment

  6.  
    Collin Barber
    2007-01-05 18:21:27
     

    Rafal,

    Great haiku. Isn't peeling a beer label supposed to be an indication of a certain kind of frustration? :)

    Perfect.

    Collin

  7.  
    RaV
    2007-01-08 14:38:38
     

    Dear Haiku Friends,

    Thank you for all your generous comments on my first haiku here.
    I'm glad it rings a bell with you.

    Regards,

    RaV

  8.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-01-10 13:37:27
     

    couple in the park
    against the aged maple--
    initials coupled

    9.