summer moon
so full
the oncoming headlights

—Robbie Gamble

About the author: Robbie Gamble: marrob2 at comcast dot net

5 responses
published 30 August 2007
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Responses to the haiku for 30 August 2007 by Robbie Gamble

  1.  
    Josh Wikoff
    2007-08-30 08:48:49
     

    Your "unorthodox" line lengths actually seem to add something to this.

    I like the little bit of assonance, too.

    Nicely done, Robbie!

  2.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-08-30 14:33:29
     

    Interesting and tight haiku, nice pivot line too!

  3.  
    Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) (maryschild44 at yahoo dot com)
    2007-08-30 14:58:15
     

    Really like how the pivot line can open forward or backward. :-)

    Nice image, too.

  4.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-08-31 19:04:46
     

    spurred on by a chilling breeze
    wavering cat's-tail
    going nowhere

  5.  
    Collin Barber
    2007-08-31 19:22:10
     

    Robbie,

    Enjoyed this one. I agree with the above comments by Josh and Alan. For me, the "unorthodox" line lengths are refreshing. I'm looking forward to reading more of your haiku.

    Collin

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