icy pond
the weight of a willow's
shadow


—Laryalee Fraser

About the author: Lary is a retired reporter/photographer, enjoying small-town life in British Columbia, Canada. Her website is "a leaf rustles".

18 responses
published 30 January 2008
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Responses to the haiku for 30 January 2008 by Laryalee Fraser

  1.  
    Magyar (magyar0109 at aol dot com)
    2008-01-30 05:43:55
     

    Wnnderful Lary,

    a silhouette
    crosses this ponds cracking ice
    the shadows voice
    _m

  2.  
    Elena
    2008-01-30 05:56:21
     

    Good one.

  3.  
    josh wikoff
    2008-01-30 08:29:31
     

    icy pond
    the weight of a willow's
    shadow

    Lary,

    Your innovative use of 'weight' shows the shadow's lack of and in doing so highlights the fragility of the ice.

    If we view your willow as a metaphor for ourselves or life in general, then 'shadow' and 'icy' really work overtime.

    Well done.

    And if you wanted to cLarify:

    the weight
    of a willow's shadow
    icy pond

    ;P

  4.  
    Angelika
    2008-01-30 11:24:22
     

    i like your haiku very much, Lary!

  5.  
    Dirk van Nouhuys
    2008-01-30 12:04:00
     

    Lovely, and likewise Magyar's response

  6.  
    Melissa
    2008-01-30 12:12:16
     

    Laryalee-

    This poem is moving, so solemn and sad. I love the wintry, grayscale imagery. Wonderful! Thank you.

  7.  
    aurora
    2008-01-30 13:26:11
     

    Excellent.

  8.  
    Artsy (artsysf at mac dot com)
    2008-01-30 13:33:24
     

    Wonderful imagery!

  9.  
    Dave Wood
    2008-01-30 14:32:49
     

    I often wonder about haiku as a real art form of expression. As hard as I try to dismisses it I am unable and brought back by such as this.

  10.  
    Terra Martin
    2008-01-30 14:54:00
     

    Larylee your reverie in this haiku is very uplifting. All shades of grey are infused with a speculative emotional color. Lovely.

  11.  
    Allison Millcock
    2008-01-30 15:31:43
     

    Hi Lary

    It was a delight to read this. Thanks for sharing.

  12.  
    Bill Kenney
    2008-01-30 15:40:55
     

    Beautiful.

  13.  
    Ross Clark
    2008-01-30 18:58:59
     

    I loved it -- such a resonant image.

  14.  
    Dana-Maria Onica
    2008-01-30 21:53:53
     

    An incredibly beautiful and inspiring poem! Thank you very much, Laryalee.

    icy river~
    willows' shades flow
    from sunrise to sunset

  15.  
    Alan Summers
    2008-01-31 00:12:06
     

    I concur with everyone else! ;-)

    Looking forward to even more haiku from you on tinywords!!!

  16.  
    Vasile Moldovan
    2008-01-31 01:32:39
     

    Listening to
    the rustle of a white willow...
    echo of echo

  17.  
    laryalee
    2008-01-31 16:27:44
     

    Thank you all so much for these lovely and supportive comments...I appreciate each and every one!
    This pond (and willow) is a favorite spot, and it's such a nice feeling to be able to share it.
    Magyar, Dana-Marie and Vasile...I enjoyed your haiku!
    ;)
    Lary

    (Josh, thanks for the suggestion - and the smile!)

  18.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2008-01-31 18:42:03
     

    morning brew
    ice crystals in her stare--
    storm in a teacup

    19.